Term Two Writing

This term we have been looking at ways to make our writing more interesting for the reader.

We have used the following criteria to guide us:

• Changing the word order of a sentence
• Using literary devices such as metaphor, simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia and  personification
• Using specific verbs and adjectives
• Using  show, don’t tell techniques
• Using different sentence beginnings and lengths

Show Don’t Tell - Emotions

Happy: I had a big smile on my face when my mum told me that we were going to America, I looked upu all the places we were going to. My heart was beating rapidly when we were setting off to the airport, I was ready to start my holidays.

Sad: My shoulders drooped, my eyes watering I shuffled to my room to try and find my teddy. Hugging myself, shivering feeling all alone I crawled onto my bed desperate to find my teddy.

Angry: Huffing and puffing, stomping on the ground I couldn’t believe that my mum had stopped me from going to the cinema. I picked up my lamp and shattered it on the floor, I didn’t really want to but I did it anyway. I throw myself on my bed and cried.

Music Writing

The Dancing Monkey

She was in her room reading an old book that she had read hundreds of times before but she loved it still. Then she faintly heard a old record that she had never heard before in the background. She got up to investigate. She slowly opened the door, it creeked sharply while being unlocked. Standing there was a monkey dancing to the old tune. She was so shocked that she couldn’t speak for a second then she came to her senses and asked politely if he could tell her what he was doing here. Instead he fastened the pace of the record and danced faster until she had asked him to stop 25 times, yes she counted. In the end she just shut the door and went back to reading her book.

Music Link: Edvard Grieg: In the Hall of the Mountain King

The Boy

Fred was walking back from school one day when he heard a strange noise from the bush, he left his bag on the side of the road and made his way into the bush. Laying there bleeding was a dog, her long hair was plated down with blood. Who could have done this Fred thought, there was no one around so he lifted the dog by himself being very careful because he could see how much pain she was in. He left his bag and ran to the nearest building, he ran into the shop holding the dying dog. “What happened Fred” the shopkeeper said in a worried glance, Fred was a regular in the local village shop. “I did nothing, I swear, I found her like this please help her”. We’ll see what we can do,” we carried the dog to the living room and layed her down on the carpet. “Fred go get the bottle of disinfectant and some bandages!!” Fred ran to the bathroom and opened the cabinet, snatched the disinfected and badges. He arrived back in the living room with the medical equipment, he glanced at the dog and started crying, the dog was a horrible sight. He felt sorry for the poor dog. The dog regained her former health in the next few days, Fred couldn’t find the carer for the beautiful dog so she stayed with him

Viking Girl

“Mum I want an Ipad air 2,” she shouted grumpily. “NO!” Mum screamed back.”Mum,”

“No.” She thought it was so unfair that she wasn’t allowed an ipad, stormed out and slammed her door after herself. She returned later that evening with her viking helmet on, she looked very angry. Mum ventured into her room just to find a massacre of ripped teddies, she strode out the door to find the spoiled girl.

By Laurence